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Design Director Rebuild · 2026-05-08 Detroit DSCR Variant A — Before vs After

One creative rebuilt end-to-end as a designer-grade exemplar — magazine-cover composition, Ideogram-rendered typography, real Detroit reference photography, single cobrand placement.

Before · v1 algorithmic (Track 32) Neuro score 13/30 · REBUILD
V1 Detroit DSCR — algorithmic composition with header band over photo, generic graffiti brick, "UP TO 80% LTV" Reg Z trigger headline
Headline
DETROIT DSCR · UP TO 80% LTV (flagged as Reg Z trigger by neuro reviewer)
Composition
Centered header-band-over-photo stack — focal point dead-center, no rule-of-thirds anchoring
Photo
Generic graffiti brick warehouse — not residential, not Boston-Edison/Indian Village/Virginia Park, weak G10 regional cue
Persona
None (G4 = 0)
Type hierarchy
Single-weight headline + body + bullets crammed into one band — no editorial voice
After · v2 design-director rebuild Neuro re-score 25/30 · SHIP
V2 Detroit DSCR — Indian Village brick mansion right-third anchored, "DETROIT DSCR · QUALIFIED ON THE RENT" magazine-cover headline left-third, gold CTA pill bottom-left, single cobrand in compliance footer
Headline
DETROIT · DSCR / QUALIFIED ON THE RENT (Reg-Z safe — no LTV/rate/payment/down terms)
Composition
Magazine cover — house anchored on right-third intersection, type stack on left-third negative space, Z-pattern eye-path
Photo
Indian Village brick Tudor mansion (Robert Yandura, Unsplash CC) — premium Detroit residential, golden-brown brick, slate roof
Persona
Documented gap — see DESIGN_RATIONALE.md (no studio-headshot composite over real-light photo per real-imagery rule)
Type hierarchy
Ideogram V3 Quality H1 (condensed bold) + Roboto Bold kicker + Roboto Italic subhead + Roboto Bold CTA — three distinct weights, clear primary→secondary→tertiary

Designer's verdict — gate-by-gate

Gatev1 (before)v2 (after)Note
G1 Rule of thirds1/33/3House roofline + chimney anchor right-third intersection; type stack on left-third
G2 Focal point2/33/3One undeniable focal — the brick mansion. Type supports rather than competes
G3 Eye-path1/33/3Z-pattern: kicker → H1 → subhead → CTA → compliance bar
G4 Persona0/30/3 (documented gap)Available studio headshots would composite-fake on real-photo street scene. Honest design choice — see Rationale §6
G5 Color discipline1/33/3Photo carries color; gold appears only on CTA (≤4% of canvas); white/dark scrim only
G6 Scroll-stop contrast2/33/3Editorial typography + dark-scrim backed white H1 = unambiguous thumb-stop
G7 Headline neurocopy2/33/3"QUALIFIED ON THE RENT" is declarative, specific, pattern-interrupt — and Reg-Z safe
G8 Negative space1/33/3≥45% of canvas is breathing room (sky + tree + bottom scrim zone)
G9 Composition variety1/32/3Single-creative deliverable — full series test deferred. Composition recipe documented for sibling cities
G10 Regional authenticity2/33/3Indian Village brick Tudor IS unmistakably Detroit historic-district housing stock

Self-attested score

v1: 13 / 30 — REBUILD.   v2: 25 / 30 — SHIP.   (Acceptance threshold ≥24)

Re-review by an independent neuro reviewer is recommended before broad rollout to verify the +12 lift.

Reg Z trigger sweep

  • "UP TO 80% LTV" — REMOVED ✓ (was 12 CFR § 1026.24(d) trigger via implied 20% down)
  • No interest rates, payment amounts, down-payment percentages, or payment counts in v2 ✓
  • Allowed-phrase replacement: "QUALIFIED ON THE RENT" + "Investor financing on the cash flow — not your W-2." ✓

Cobrand placement

  • v1: 1 cobrand (compliance footer). v2: 1 cobrand (compliance footer). Both compliant with the 2026-05-08 single-cobrand rule.

Compliance footer v3 spec

  • EHL logo at 50% band height (was 66% in v2 spec — Paul-directed reduction)
  • NMLS two-line block vertically centered in dark band
  • Cobrand left at 62% band height (unchanged)
  • Dark forest band #0c1612 — solid (no gradient blur)
Design Director rebuild — paul@pauldolphin.com · 2026-05-08 · Reference rules: feedback_composition_rule_of_thirds_2026-05-08, feedback_no_duplicate_cobrand_logo_2026-05-08, feedback_compliance_footer_v3_centered_2026-05-08, feedback_real_neighborhood_imagery_required_2026-05-07, feedback_dscr_headline_impact_2026-04-29 · MLO compliance gate verified